I saw you were looking for constructive criticism on your zombie WIP, so I thought I might take a peek at it.
I think it’s certainly a good start. You have clearly put some thought into the virus, and I can appreciate your inclination to operate in a counter-intuitive way, by stating in the narrative that this zombie outbreak did not happen as one might expect.
That said, I also think that if there is a weakness in your piece, so far, it’s that it does an awful lot of telling about the situation, but so far leaves us in the dark about who we’re following or why, though I imagine you intend to get to that. I think that you might benefit by considering that you might be able to convey the situation through events, rather through simply describing them in the narrative. I think what will be most important moving forward is demonstrating to us how this zombie scenario differs from what we’re used to.
Keep at it! I hope this was helpful to you.
Thank you for sending me this! It really makes me happy that you’ve realized that I’ve done my fair share of research (I’ve turned into a nerd for Rabies, it kind of scares me, and now I’m researching mad cows disease. Eating flesh causes insanity, so why can’t my zombies shake from withdraw?)
The protagonist is going to be a boy, most likely named Isaac (my friend wanted Adam but on the off chance I get this published I don’t want people thinking “By Adam the author meant to symbolize the first man on earth, in the attempt to..”. No, I meant his name is Adam.) I wanted to introduce the post apocalyptic world and then introduce my guy, but I was at a loss for how much I should explain, while torn about how little I should talk about it at first and explain as I go.
This book will have so many drafts (both dreading it and very excited!)
THANK YOU for this. I needed the help :)